Thread:Shanethefilmmaker/@comment-397235-20140722012358/@comment-397235-20140723231610

I did some more thinking, and I honestly think there needs to be more closure with Takeru and Kouichi. I'd have their second fight take place around the same time Kouichi fought Tomohiko in the anime. His motivations are more or less in line with Tomohiko's (he's after Kouichi because he thinks Kouichi killed Sanae) but he takes Takako's approach and doesn't go after anyone else. This irritates Takako since he's blatantly going after the wrong person, and rather than mentioning an "old hag," she mentions "that other idiot" who'd already attacked Kouichi once and been driven off by Yumi.

The second fight is a lot more brutal, and this is the one Takeru pulls the knife during. Kouichi beats him again, and takes the knife to kill Takeru, but decides not to. Takeru asks him why, and Kouichi replies either out of respect for Sanae, or because he thinks their family has been through enough.

I'd also put in one fight for Tomohiko. He goes looking for his friends, either to help Mei escape or reason with Takako (depending on which he runs into). Instead he runs into Kenzou and Noboru, who are clearly guarding one potential exit.

Tomohiko: I need to get through-

Kenzou: Nobody comes through here. Not till they get Misaki.

Tomohiko: Says who? Takako?

Kenzou: Takeru. He says we're supposed to keep everyone else away. No exceptions.

Tomohiko: I want to help.

Kenzou: No exceptions.

Noboru: But it's Kazami man. He's-

Kenzou: No exceptions.

Tomohiko: I just talked to Izumi. I've...there's something I need to tell Takako and Takeru.

Kenzou: What?

Tomohiko: Izumi told me not to tell anyone else. It'll just cause a panic.

Kenzou: Good, then tell us, and one of us will carry the message.

Tomohiko *sighs in frustration*: There's...another extra.

Noboru: What?

Tomohiko: Mei...she's not the only extra.

Kenzou: That's...not good. Who is it?

Tomohiko *Glances nervously at Noboru, then motions Kenzou closer*: It's...*Kenzou leans forward. Tomohiko knees him in the gut, causing him to double over, before elbowing the back of his head. Kenzou drops.*

Noboru: Damn...

Tomohiko: You know Kendo? Japanese martial arts. Lots of fun, definitely worth checking out. *Takes a step toward Noboru, who flinches away.* Can I pass?

Noboru *Stammers*: Uh...sure. Go ahead.

Tomohiko *Smiles*: Good man.

Noboru looks at Kenzou.

Tomohiko: Oh, he'll be fine. He'll have a headache, sure, but I doubt he's smart enough for that to have done permanent damage. I'd say you need to get him out of here, before things get really out of hand.

Noboru: What about what you said. Izumi-

Tomohiko: Izumi and I aren't exactly speaking. That was a bluff.

Noboru: Where are you going?

Tomohiko: You take care of your friend. I'm going to help mine.

There's also, of course, the mythology gag of Kenzou having been in the kendo club in the anime.